Help me. Part 2. School.

[Tristanayoubi]

Haha im not having a panic attack, but i have thiz english thing, and I just want to know if it sounds good.. kinda stressing on it.

here it is:

you get up and howl about America and democracy, there is no America there is no democracy. we no longer live in the world nations and ideologies. the world is a college of Corporations, inexorably determined by the immutable by laws of business. the world is a business and I have chosen you to preach this evangel.

[Enduronman]

That may be abit harsh to hear, in an American school friend..America is still a democracy, or I wouldnt be typing this reply to you now. We live in America, yet America is still in the midst of a huge trainwreck created by corporate greed, and there are no debates about that. I believe the comment as a whole- the America is no democracy part.. Replace that with something abit more tactful yet not so harsh. jus sayin..

Enduronman.

[Tristanayoubi]

thats what im trying to say.. im trying to make a point that America is being corrupted by corporate greed.

[Siegfried]

Why 'America', though? What do you think is different in, say, Europe?

[Buttercup]

Is this a written or oral exercise? Who will the audience be or who will be reading it?

[Tristanayoubi]

Is this a written or oral exercise? Who will the audience be or who will be reading it?

it's a debate type discussion in english class